Thread: Post your Poetry (No plagiarism)

So guys, I wanted to see if any of my techy pals here are into writing their own poetry. That's why I made this thread. If you wish to post poetry in this thread, please make SURE that it is your own creation. I'll start it out with one poem of mine (I am worse than an amateur so don't laugh) that I wrote around 3 years ago. Please DO post your own writing, don't be shy. I posted this debacle, ANYTHING would be better than this so give it a shot :) I'll be posting some more of mine tomorrow, I sure hope someone else has posted by then.

With your beauty you have taken my heart away
Since then you have been so close yet so far away
This skill of yours I must commend
This skill that's rendered my heart unable to mend
But I must credit every part
That's piece by piece taken away my heart

The first to come are your eyes
Like guardians of eternal beauty in the skies
Or like majestic wells adorned with precious stones
That but hint at the majesty of the soul below

And when I see your tossing locks
Your fingers running through your curls
My heart for an endless instant stops
Your image digging into my brain like spurs

Other accomplices in this theft are your rosy cheeks
Like fresh apples freshly plucked from trees
Or like battlefields reddened by the flood
Of your countless quarreling admirers' blood



But the chief of all these thieves
Turns out to be the way you speak
The brook, is but an ill example of your prowess
You surpass the nightingale when you do address
And thorugh these clever crafts and arts
You haven stolen away my foolish heart
Leaving a hollow, where I once had a beating heart.



P.S: Do NOT LAUGH :)

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An interesting thread. It's been a long time since I have laboured to write anything under the illusion of poetic inspiration. Poetry is an art form that I admire too much to whimsically sully. The distillation of experience, pirouetting on the knife edge between thought and expression. As with an iceberg so much is not immediately obvious; the insight, command and imagination that is required to choreograph such a simple thing with alacrity. But I look forward to reading verse from anyone who might take up the gauntlet themselves.

In my first year of university, we had a larger than life English professor. A Dicksonian character out of his time. One who bucked convention, who did largely as he pleased whether it be wearing a kilt or showing up for class unabashedly drunk. In half a heartbeat he could swing from mesmerizing engagement to stinging contempt towards our inept efforts. What intoxicated me though was his passion for language and virtuoso command of it's intricacies. An appreciation for his strength of character was slower in realization.

An exercise that he would have us do, the source of some anguish was to write verse under a false time constraint. 5 minutes, no more. The results were ludicrous, but it was an illuminating experience nonetheless. So I contribute 5 minutes to demonstrate how not to write.


Restless stars on a dark morrow's eve
the moon so full to swell, the darkness settles
Wanton the soul to escape, hope astride
perfect clarity elusive in sight


hmmm.. well, I haven't made full use of the five minute allotment.. but it's hard to concentrate when I'm laughing at my own effort
Obviously, this won't be published anywhere, anytime soon. ..fun thread, tho

Cool! But I fail to see how a person who is obviously very adept at expressing his thoughts in prose (Don't deny it) could never have had even the faintest urge to venture into the world of poetry. What you wrote in less than five minutes is probably better than what I'm gonna post now (and which, by the way, took me around an hour to write, 3 years ago).

Now copper, I commend you on your attempt, and I hope you'll be posting some more of your work soon... Who knows? Maybe I'll publish it :D :D

LET THE LAUGHING COMMENCE:


I know that you may never know
A boy was slowly dying for you
I know that you will never see
The boy that once saw only you

I know that you will never feel
The pain he felt when he looked at you
So it's not you that I blame
For my ceaselessly bleeding wounds

For I know, that you may never know
A boy was slowly dying for you




I stress AGAIN, please post your own stuff. We'd all LOVE to see it :)

Ok, so I used to write poems back in the day, so here are a few. Note that these poems may not reflect my current views on life..:P

"Reality Check"

I know the walk; I can talk the talk, how long must I go on crying?
The pain is much, I cannot bear, someone please stop the dying.

I know the truth, I see the light, I know of peace forever.
I live my life of disarray; I search for all foolish endeavors.

There comes a day, not far away, when the blood will keep on flowing.
I will die, we will all know why; the razor still is glowing.

I have the choice, sink or swim, which one I do not know.
My life is short; it fades away, even as the wind must blow.

~Me

"My life"

My hear was filled with hate and greif
My eyes shown forth my foolish disbelief.
I could not love, I could not care
My pain shows through my eternal glare.
I had no sense of hope, my future wasn't clear
The pain inside my heart transcends a shattered mirror.
I hated those around me, even those who really cared
I hated them with deep passion, I wasn't even scared.
Yet, then, when all was wrong, I felt this love inside
I could see the path to life, but refused to take the ride.
My hart was churning with sarrow, deep inside, within
Why me? Why do I feel such pain? Because of all my sin.
Then it happended, the word ever so I could see.
God showed me a great, great love. Even greater than all of me.
He aroze and then consumed me, like a cat late for a meal,
He showed me the way of the righteous, that him I might reveal.
I now know the purpose for all my strife and pain,
I needed to see his love, that I will ever now proclaim.
Each day is like a step, in the eternal path of life,
I forever will do his will, no matter the burden or strife.
I now know that he loves me, I am a part of his intricate plan,
Satan cannot destroy me; neither shall any pluck me out of his hand.
I am his child forever, his name I will ever serve,
He saved me from myself, with his great love i did not deserve.
Thank you Jesus

~Me

Some times in life

you gotta just smoke the greens
From grass to seed the wind will blow
yet through it all steady's weed must grow
the seeds he plants shall hence arize
to give us all that glorious sunrise
its that icki sticky, that dank smooth shit
just shut the eff up, and matha fuckin smoke it

~Me

Good going SteadySeed! If all these are from "back in the day" then you could do an EVEN better job now! :) Why don't you write up some fresh stuff that we can admire further :)

OK, and here is another one of mine :) :

How can I to you explain
That I, for your sake
At the feet of merciless fate
Happily my loveless life would lay

If only I were first given a hint
That after I have become extinct

You would for a single instant wait
To consider favoring my forgotten grave
With the most precious thing to me
A single kiss from you to me

You walked away and so did I
You never looked back, but then, neither did I
When the anger passed, I felt like a part of me had died
I don't want to, but I hope you felt the same as I
I hoped against hope that you would return to me
And I wished that you wished to still be with me

As I sit here alone, I wonder
What it was that split us asunder
"It matters not", I think aloud
For I've lost the perfect one I'd found
I know it is in vain
But I hope someday you'll rid me of my pain

I hope you will return with forgiveness in your eyes
And tell me you didn't mean it, because neither did I...



^^ This one's 1.5 years old :) Come on guys, we needz MOAR posters :)

More, more, more....

U guys are goooood

Copper, I thought your fist 2 paragraphs were part of the poem lol, they read just like a poem the way you wrote it with such eloquence.
Rock3r, mayyn your deeep........ly in love with some chick Very nice...
SteadySeed, who would've thought you got the poetic talent...some good stuff man

Keep it up guys

I ain't got a shred of talent in poetry so can't post anything but i do appreciate it and had to post to give you my encouragement.

You guys are very talented. Who'd of thought i'd find modern day shakespeare's on an online torrent forum (:
I have a journal with some poetry back at home (unfortunately i'm currently attending university in another city). I never really had a knack for the structure of poetry I just wrote what was on my mind and sometimes it just happened to rhyme...haha, see.

But anyways, keep this thread going it really is amazing. Poetry has a way of bringing out the sincerest parts of us, the parts that get pushed to the back of our spirits because of everyday stress and pressures. This thread and you guys are awesome!

Let's have more contributors!

Hey Rock3r not sure if you have seen this, however if you haven't check it out. Official thread for poems

In particular you will most likely enjoy the entries by mackenna real shame he became inactive on here.